2007年10月10日 星期三
Barbecue
We did not have to go to school on Double Ten National Day. We decided to have a barbecue last Wednesday with some close friends. In this barbecued activity, we had eight members include Stanley, Simon, Chezzie, Nicole, Jamie, Ema, Squirrel and me. All of the girls prepared some food for barbecue and boys prepared some drinks for everybody before barbecue. We went to not only a supermarket but a food market to buy a lot of food that we want to eat. For example, we bought some corned pork flakes, corns, two fish, clams, green peppers, toast, a squid and mushroom. We chose a place to barbecue next the dormitory. Unluckily when we started to barbecue, it rained a little bit. Because of a little rain we changed place to pavilion. The rain stopped soon, so we changed the place to original one. We continued to barbecue till food was finished off. We had a lot of fun in the end.
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The activity you were involved in was not "barbecued"; you must say something like "Eight of us participated (參與; 加入)."
You don't have to repeat "for the barbecue" when you say that all the girls prepared food. The reader will understand what the food was for. This is a common problem in the English essays of Taiwanese. I'm not familiar enough with Chinese writing styles, so I don't know whether this is because it's necessary to repeat the topic often. Maybe you can enlighten me in class.
"food that we wanted to eat". The barbecue is over, so this verb has to be in the past tense, just like the rest of the paragraph. English verb tense is also a major problem for Chinese speakers.
Word order is a problem here: "We chose a place to barbecue next the dormitory" should be "We chose a place next to the dormitory to barbecue".
Awkward sentence structure because of the previous two sentences: "so we changed the place to original one" should be "so we returned to our original {place/spot/location}".
"till food was finished off. We had a lot of fun in the end." This is a strange way of saying what you want to say. It really doesn't say what you mean. It should be "until all the food had been eaten. We had a lot of fun".
Otherwise, however, your English is good and would present no problems when writing a business letter. What you mean is very clear.
I notice, though, that you haven't been keeping up with your writing assignments. That's a no-no if you want to pass this class. If I give you a zero for every post you've missed, so far, you will fail the class this semester. This warning is not for you only but for everyone else who thinks that they can skip their writing assignments.
You are not the only one who seems to think that they can get away with something. One of the reasons I chose to have you post your writings to an Internet blog is that the blogging software tells me the date and time and allows me to view everything you've written. It's your responsibility to make sure that your posts are on the Internet, not mine to save them in emails and then tell you that I haven't received your emails, only to have you tell me that you sent them and something strange must have happened.
If any of you out there think you cannot fail the class just because you come to class and occupy your seat, you are sadly mistaken. If you fail to do the work assigned, you fail to pail the class. Please notice that I said "you fail" and not "I fail you". I hope you understand the difference.
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