I did not have any classes on Wednesday. My best friend, Squirrel she did not have classes in the morning on Wednesday, so she invited me to have a dinner with her family on Tuesday evening.
Squirrel lived on Shin-ying city and we had to take a train to the Shin-ying station so that her father could take us to home. Both of Squirrel and I were very hungry as soon as we arrived at home. Her father cooked beef noodles for dinner. To tell the truth, I did love to eat the beef noodles cooked by her father. I thought that if people tasted it once, they would adore eating beef noodles like me because it was really delicious. Her father also cooked Wine shrimps, it really tasted deliciously, too. We ate it with some beers. What a wonderful dinner. I did have a good time with her family. Her father drove us back into the dormitory on Wednesday afternoon because Squirrel had three computer classes.
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"My best friend, Squirrel she did not have" ==> "My best friend, Squirrel, didn't have".
"have a dinner". This is not idiomatic: "have dinner" is idiomatic.
"Squirrel lived on Shin-ying city". Oh, no! What are you saying here? You can't possibly mean this. The last time I was in Shin-Ying, there was nothing on top of the city to live on. All I saw was sky. Okay, maybe a few clouds too, but they are substantial enough to live on. ==> "Squirrel lives in Shin-ying city".
"station so that her father could take us to home." ==> "station. Her father picked us up and drove us to her house."
Use the active voice, not the passive: "I did love to eat the beef noodles cooked by her father." ==> "I loved the beef noodles her father cooked for us."
"they would adore eating beef noodles like me because it was really delicious." Are there really beef noodles like you? That's what your sentence says. I don't think you meant to say that, though. ==> "they, too, would adore his beef noodles." You can leave out the "because it was really delicious": why else would they "adore" them? That's why most people eat one thing instead of another: taste.
"Her father also cooked Wine shrimps,[COMMA SPLICE] it really tasted deliciously, too." ==> "Her father also cooked some delicious wine shrimp. I adored that dish, too."
"back into the dormitory" ==> "back to the dormitory". I don't think he was allowed to drive his car "into" the dormitory. Please reread what you wrote to make sure it makes sense. This sentence doesn't make any sense.
You have to add "that afternoon" to the last sentence, and, probably, "and we didn't wake up in time to take a train back to school.
Otherwise, your English is reasonably clear.
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