I made a plan after school on Friday night. The plan was that I went to saw a movie with my friend, Janice in the library of my school. We picked and chose an affectional film because we wanted to watch different film after last film. The movie was called A Cinderella Story. It was about a woman met her prince charming online. They did not know the real identity of each other until the Halloween dance party. The woman recognized that her prince charming was the most popular person of her high school. But he did not recognize his princess because she was wearing a mask. When he discovered her real identity, he gave her an astonished look. She felt very embarrassed and shame at what she done before. She was heartbroken and her dream was destroyed by the man. However after thinking about their love, the man decided to overcome a lot of difficulties between him and her. They got together forever in the end. The film touched me deeply. I think if people found their true love they must cherish and treat each other gently.
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Your first two sentences are too long and can be combined into one:
"My friend Janice and I made a plan to see a movie in the STUT library after school on Friday night."
When and where have you ever seen the word "affectional"? Yes, it's in the dictionary, but it's not everyday English. No native speaker would ever use it except in a technical paper. The kind of movie you watched can be accurately described as either a romantic movie (a love story), or a "chick-flick" (a movie that is especially intended for a female audience because it's unbearably romantic).
What do these two sentences mean?:
"She felt very embarrassed and shame at what she done before. She was heartbroken and her dream was destroyed by the man."
I understand the English; that's not the problem. The problem is that you tell us nothing about what the girl had done before, how it had affected the boy, why she was ashamed of herself, why she was or had been heartbroken, or how the boy had destroyed her dream. We can't figure that out for ourselves. This all may be secret code for "They used to be lovers in high school, but he dumped her and took another girl to the senior prom", or "She had a serious crush on him in high school, but he wouldn't even look at her because she wore braces and lived on the 'wrong side of town'."
What were the difficulties between the two of them? You're dealing in abstractions here, and plot summaries of movies require concrete details to be interesting. Otherwise, you might have said something like this: "The plot is that a boy and girl meet on line and make a date for a Halloween ball. She recognizes him but he doesn't recognize her because she's wearing a mask. They knew each other in high school and had some unpleasant dealings. But now they realized that they loved each other enough to forget their unpleasant past and get married and try to live happily ever after."
"I think if people found their true love they must cherish and treat each other gently." This is pure pablum, I'm afraid. It says nothing of value. I don't see how it's connected to the movie. You might as well have pulled this out of a fortune cookie at an American Chinese restaurant. It's a sticky platitude suitable for all occasions because it says nothing at all.
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